The part I don’t like is in the beginning. He spends some time honing his skills and searching for life… That could get boring real fast. I wouldn’t spend too much time on this part, maybe just a few lines letting us know how much time has passed.

Also, what skills is he honing? From the sounds of it he hasn’t been aware of the warlock/demon part of him…

Good work and keep writing!

EDIT: I looked back and saw you mention a few skills he would be working on. I think that if you spend too much time talking about his ‘powers’ and what he can do with them it will definitely get boring. You should just let his powers be known through his actions throughout the book – don’t tell us all of them right away.

Be sure there are limits to any superpowers–the characters have to overcome challenges, not just go through events. And make sure you get into the personality of the protagonist–if we don’t care about him, we won’t care about any of it. I’m thinking something along the lines of Elric from Moorcock’s fantasies–a guy trying to find a bit of light in a dark world, only to find each bit of light, both in the world and himself, getting snuffed out by the evil surrounding him, but still never losing hope.

There is a flower standing through the
cracks of the sidewalk.
It pulls itself into itself
surely knowing something that I do not.

I said plenty right there for the inquisitive mind about science, hopelessness, love, ************. . . . .

To see what I mean check out a synopsis I wrote for a novel of mine. Google, Christopher Pascale and then check out the Amazon reviews. Mine should be at the top listed as “From the Author.”