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oasis live
Jo-Jo LUV<3 asked:

You don’t know

Wow.
City lights,
vacant buildings,
so much wonder…
the water droplets
screamed
out of the sky,
trying to
escape
the clouds grasp
on them.
Racing,
ripples
of water
ripped through the gray,
endless abyss.
Gasping,
heart
thrusting
through my chest.
A-mazing!
Nothing
could end this.
The lights,
Glinting,
through the blur
of it all.
You can’t imagine
the beauty!
The oasis of blue.
The sapphire snake
rushed through the barren ground.
The river.
No one
understands.
Thoughts
rushing through
the surface of my
imaginative nature.
Beautiful.
Love for an
non-living thing.
The earth…
but wait it is
alive!
Blooming
with brilliance.
Containing all
joy.
Bring down…
lift up…
around and through!
You don’t know.
The water
gliding
across
everything.
Seeds sprouting!
Lives changed?
Do you know?
Better yet do you care?
No!
Take some time…
look around…
appreciate it,
live it!

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7 Responses to 'do you like this. let me know?'

  1. Desperate for answers - March 21st, 2010 at 9:40 am

    ripples part is tight.

  2. BHS2010 - March 24th, 2010 at 2:08 am

    Yesss omg i lovee it! Its a great poem!

  3. Stupidquestions8 - March 27th, 2010 at 9:42 am

    i like it :)

  4. funnygirl1015 - March 30th, 2010 at 10:58 am

    that is great you should write more

  5. Jamie - April 2nd, 2010 at 1:06 am

    Its fine, Is it poetry or are you play the word association game on your own?

  6. awesome.happiness - April 2nd, 2010 at 4:07 am

    Yeahh it’s cool, but long lol

  7. Brandon S - April 5th, 2010 at 11:29 am

    its not bad, needs some editing. Try not to try so hard.are you a tree hugger ?


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